The WHY Behind It
Thu Jul 15 2004

OK, I've had enough comments asking why I put my diary up for review and I don't want to repeat myself too much, so here it is.

I was hoping for a review in which the writing style itself would be critiqued, and with luck, give information or pointers on more effective writing.

I don't care what people think about how my diary looks, I don't care what people think about the things I write, what I care about is feedback on what would make me a more effective communicator of the written word.

I have no feelings against Duween for his review; he was accurate in almost everything he commented on. I didn’t necessarily get feedback on what I wanted other than his blurb because she does write well. While I acknowledge that anyone who does a review on me is not necessarily an English teacher, or someone who works in the field of writing, but I like to think that most people that read can give a feedback on whether my writing is coherent or not. It would be nice for someone to point out run-on sentences or comma splices (of which I do a lot as I tend to write the way I speak). Spelling is something I focus on, and I’ve had spelling errors pointed out to me in the past. It doesn’t bug me! Bring it on people! I overuse ellipses, and though this has been pointed out to me I’m not sure if it is something I will ever get over. It goes back to that writing like I talk bit.

As for the bit about the diary being pink, who cares? You all know me! It’s very likely to be blue, green or yellow in a week or two. It is easier (and less expensive) to redecorate my diary than it is my house, so I do it often!

The one and ONLY reason I related the review here in my diary is that I found it so hilarious that the reviewer thought the joke was a true life experience of my Hubby. For those of you that know us IRL, you’ve seen a 6 pack sit in our fridge for a month or more, and you know my housekeeping habits (or lack thereof) well enough to know that should Hubby have uttered that to me in a drunken state, cleaning the house would NOT have been my response. It is far more likely I would have gone out and gotten chocolate for Hubby (we are both incurable chocoholics for those that don’t know us personally) if I did anything at all.

That being said, any comments on my writing style are ALWAYS appreciated. Bring it on!

10 Comments
  • From:
    Enchantedbutterfly (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004

    Hey nothing wrong in requesting a critique if you can take it in stride. Many people get outraged when someone says something negative about a friend. Critiques are supposed to find the flaws and point them out. I don?t think I have ever read a review that didn?t do that. I participated in a review from DDCritic. He said nice things, but also said things that I was thinking..."I hope no one else noticed that! LOL" But I was never even offended to his review, because I asked what his opinion was. DDCritic lacked tact to say the least, and many people got offended...not only those who received a negative review, but other diarist just reading. I chose to never let someone else?s offense become my own. But many lack the maturity to separate that and in turn strike out in verbal anger of something that has nothing to do with them. Ah well....they all cant be as perfect as me! LOL

    I say if you want to be critiqued a thousand times by a thousand different readers, with a thousand different opinions, then go for it?after all you get critiqued everyday when you open your diary up to comments.



  • From:
    Cutypops (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004
    true butterfly!

    i have thought about submitting mine, with my lack of capitals, what would they say...

    and what would they say about my hubby....

    oh what the heck!
  • From:
    Enchantedbutterfly (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004
    Golden Rain...hahahahhaha

    How very appropriate!
  • From:
    Sugardancer1007 (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004
    LOL @ tree type.
  • From:
    InStitches (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004
    Golden Rain Tree...I love it. You have a wry sence of humor. lol
  • From:
    Pragmatist (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004
    I've thought about requesting a review, but I haven't been writing much lately...a fault I'm trying to correct.

    I'm not going to make any comments about your diary beyond saying that I like the birdhouses and potted plants in the background.

    And when I get bored with you, I'll stop reading.


    Shalom
  • From:
    Pragmatist (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004
    I knew about mock juries. In fact, some law school use them as teaching instruments. I've never served on one, but I have been on an actual jury. Didn't much care for it, but I did my civic duty.

    Shalom
  • From:
    Yetzirah (Legacy)
    On:
    Thu Jul 15 2004
    That jury thing sounds fishy to me.....
  • From:
    Salamander (Legacy)
    On:
    Fri Jul 16 2004
    Guess I should have read this entry first before commenting to yesterday's. Still, you should already know you write well. You have a loyal following, and you get a good deal of feedback. I hate that you had to go to some anonymous reviewer to get verification of this. It makes me feel guilty that I haven't been telling you this all along.
  • From:
    Bogomils (Legacy)
    On:
    Sun Jul 18 2004
    I type the way I speak as well. This is why my writing style has so many riddles. With a public education system english education, what does the pretty critic want? Maybe we should all take a class at Yale to become English Professors.

    I think the Critic should read some of the Ebononics out there in diary land. I do, and can't understand a single word written.

    I love your diary and the background. I find it well thought out and enjoyable. Please remember your fans when looking at DD, there are alot of us who really love you....

    Bright Blessings... Bogo